Week 1 Dutchcrippler, A new journey

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Week 1 Dutchcrippler, A new journey

Post by Dutchcrippler on Wed Jun 13, 2018 5:13 am

The titantron turns on and we can see Dutchcrippler in a local gym, with a tv on the background having a wrestling show on, Dutchcrippler still can't believe he got hired for a show.
while working out he gets lost in his thoughts and talks to himself


Dutcrippler: Still can't believe we got hired for a show. a new road, a new experience, time to prove everyone wrong and that we can make it in this business. we shall not back down from any challange. we shall not fail!

the more he thinks the more fired up he gets

i didn't trained for years to see it all fade away now, this is my time to rise and shine!

as the crowd on the tv starts cheering, Dutchcrippler starts to imagine, and here is your winner by submission and the new world heavyweight champion, Dutchcrippler!    crowd stands up, cheering and screaming their lungs out, confetti falling from the ceiling, center light directed on him, climbing up turnbuckles to show off his new achievement.
as the sound fades he continues to train harder, to get himself ready for anything that comes...


Last edited by Dutchcrippler on Fri Jun 15, 2018 1:41 am; edited 2 times in total
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Re: Week 1 Dutchcrippler, A new journey

Post by Road Warrior on Thu Jun 14, 2018 11:10 am

I like the idea behind the roleplay but correct me if I'm wrong, the few dialogues are his thoughts, right? If that's the case remember that we are trying to recreate a wrestling tv show, and listening to someone thought would be impossible.
So I would suggest two options:
1) Reformulate some parts to make clear the audience is seeing a video with a narrator, writing something like:

The titantron turns on and we can see Dutchcrippler in a local gym, with a tv on the background having a wrestling show on, and as he trains, a voice can be heard.

Voice: I can't believe I got hired for a show. a new road, a new experience, time to prove everyone wrong and that I can make it in this business. I shall not back down from any challenge. I shall not fail!

2) another way could be making Dutchcrippler talk to himself, in that case, you can start with something like.

in a local gym, with a tv on the background having a wrestling show on, the audience can see Dutchcrippler training, all of a sudden he stops and walks toward one of the mirrors on the wall, he contemplates his reflection for a few seconds before taking it.

Dutcrippler: Still can't believe we got hired for a show. a new road, a new experience, time to prove everyone wrong and that we can make it in this business. we shall not back down from any challenge. we shall not fail!

Hope this helps.

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